A Night Out | Bryan Williams Feedback

Ernie Parker
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A Night Out | Bryan Williams Feedback Sept 4, 2016 18:10:45 GMT

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Post by Ernie Parker on Sept 4, 2016 18:10:45 GMT

Hey @bryanwilliams,

Nice first piece there on the CD boards. It did a great job in giving the audience a brief glimpse of the kind of character Bryan is (having read a lot of your stuff now) while also introduce his supporting cast and hint at the father angle that I've caught snippets of over at 4CW. The flow was great, the dialogue was fairly natural and effortless - it was just an enjoyable read, so kudos to you for that.

Looking forward to seeing more from you broski!

Deleted Deleted Member Posts: 0	A Night Out \| Bryan Williams Feedback Sept 4, 2016 21:22:21 GMT Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Back to Top Post by Deleted on Sept 4, 2016 21:22:21 GMT Thanks! Exactly what I was going for with the piece, just to get people up to speed on everything, glad it came out that way.

Valentina Lemay
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A Night Out | Bryan Williams Feedback Sept 5, 2016 8:58:32 GMT

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Post by Valentina Lemay on Sept 5, 2016 8:58:32 GMT

I thought this was a good piece. Having only seen a little of your work in the past this was a great way for me to learn more about the character and it did it well. It flowed nicely and did leave me in a place where I'm looking forward to seeing your next piece.

It's great to have you here

Trixie
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A Night Out | Bryan Williams Feedback Sept 5, 2016 12:35:41 GMT

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Post by Trixie on Sept 5, 2016 12:35:41 GMT

Hi. I haven't seen any of your work so this was very enjoyable for me to get a big idea on Bryan and Tate and this Dad of his that made it all sort of uncomfortable on their date night out. Happy they did have that public kiss (kinda, no one was there, but still, progress lol). Very enjoyable to read and a good start to EOW too with his contract. Look forward to reading your next piece; the Victory RP from what I saw at a glance when it was posted. I'll definitely have a read of that now that I sat down to read this one. Hope to get more of an insight as to why they both dislike the dad, or at least Tate really does.

Deleted: Dang it. I had a third one ready for Evie but had a family emergency. My daughter broke out in terrible hives. Ended up in emergency. I made post in in the CD board anyway. Good luck Trixie! Oct 8, 2016 15:46:50 GMT

Trixie: Don't sweat it Mandy, you did 2 amazing ones. Hope she's ok, did she get any lotion for it? Good luck to you too, I'll read that 3rd one. Oct 8, 2016 16:00:20 GMT

Deleted: She got a shot of steroids. Turns out its a yogurt allergy. With a picky eater, it sucks taking away a food she'll actually eat. Oct 8, 2016 22:24:11 GMT

A Night Out | Bryan Williams Feedback

Post by Ernie Parker on Sept 4, 2016 18:10:45 GMT

Post by Deleted on Sept 4, 2016 21:22:21 GMT

Post by Valentina Lemay on Sept 5, 2016 8:58:32 GMT

Post by Trixie on Sept 5, 2016 12:35:41 GMT